Rhythm question please

[Hector Pascal]

Hi everyone,
I'm trying to decide how best to notate the rhythm, ie: top example or bottom example. (In particular whether to use the tie or a quaver).

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Thanks for any assistance which is always appreciated!
Cheerio,
HP.

[Anders Hedelin]

In my opinion the second example definitely is the better one. It's more standard notation, I would think, and also easier to read because it's simpler.

Possibly the syncopes may be spelled out with ties for young children, but then this doesn't look like children's music.

[NeeraWM]

Definitely the second one.
Syncopes are standard rhythm and easily recognisable, besides looking much better than tied notes!

[JJP]

Second is definitely clearer.

If you did want to keep the tie, I'd break the second beam under it; and perhaps reverse it to keep the subdivisions clear.

[Hector Pascal]

Many thanks, all! I will go with the second one!
Much appreciated,
Hector.